Hade's WIPs

[snowodin]

I'm currently working on a Poem for mother's day... Can you guys tell me what you think about it?

I appreciate all you've done
All the joy you've brought me
All the things you've bought me
That you took me as your son

Although I don't remember it all
I remember we used to laugh
We had such great times and fun
The happiness never seemed to fall

Then as I could walk
I began to wander
I kept going father and farther
Eventually, I could talk

When I could learn, you taught me
From you I learned to ride my bike
I learned my language, the way I speak
And for this, I humbly thank thee

I grew older still, and went to school
You didn't see me as much
I know you were sad then
But still you kept your cool

Eventually I, in school, was bullied
You took me out because you cared
You took your own time to teach me
For this, my gratitude fullied

And now I am a teen
I know I'm not the best
But I really do try
To be as little mean

And now, on this day, know that I'm fine
Today I will be the helper, the supporter
The one to encourage, the one to cheer up
Today, all those responsibilities, are mine.

[moonmomma]

no comments to make on the writing, but as a mom myself i can tell you that this will totally make her day!

[plasticat]

Really nice job!

[snowodin]

Thanks you two! :3

And, @ moonmomma, thanks for reassuring me on that. I've been worrying that it wouldn't meet mother standards, or a mother's watchful eye on errors and whatnot. You lifted a bit of weight off of me. ^^